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Under My Bed
I'm a monster... lately
Inside... outside
Afraid to be this guy
Kept it down and hidden
For so long
So so long
Judged and criticized
Anyone who acted this way
Created
Another aspect of my shadow
Repressed, bottled up, denied
And now it's who I am
At least for today
Never thought I'd let anyone
See me this way
Me... of all people
NO!
I won't believe it
This monster can't be me!
Who is this impostor, really?
This monster that I see
May 16, 2008
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Comment by: pitbull - 2008-05-17 17:26
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| heartfelt poem...one word says it all "denied" great job |
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| Thanks and good point. I did have it as 'this monster that I see' at first. I changed it, but wasn't really sure which I liked better. It's definately an inner struggle, but at the same time, I'm not used to purposely hurting people like this or getting called a jerk or viscious. |
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| I like this, but I think if you made the simple change of making the last line "This monster that I see", instead of, " this monster that they see", then it will be much better. Thought being, that you are really the only one that sees any of this, it is a battle within, and nothing that anyone else can really see. To everyone else, you are just regular, George. But, I guess it all depends on how you portray yourself to others, but mostly, no one can see our internal struggles. Know what I mean? |
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Comment by: sadon - 2008-05-16 10:03
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i know how this feels...and i guess we are all tht monster sumday or another!
great job! |
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