writing community
Sign In Here | Lost Password | FREE Sign Up
E-mail: Password:
Remember login  
The place for writers:
Upload your writing in minutes, receive peer feedback from other writers, poets, authors, then get your work published out there in the real world.       Learn how other writers are doing it.

 
RossEan
Ross Ean Martinez
United States, Colorado, The Center of the Universe (Denver)

Words: 280
Access: Public
Comments: 1

Forward to a friend
Print Version
E-mail this writer E-mail this user 
View Author profile
Add to Readers  




Sierra two (Apr 17th)

You are the nectar that was never tasted, you are the dreams that were never cradled. You are like the wind that rattles the cages, you are the nature that escapes us.

You are like the warmth that comes in stages. You are the life that was never created. You make us seem like we are whole, you give value to what we’ve know. You are the twilight and the blessing. You are the birth of what we created.

You are the forest set a fire, you are the tree’s that refuse to burn. You are like the seeds buried into the soil. You are the silent witness to what we discovered.

You are the morning that becomes the dawn. You are the forest that becomes a swamp. You are the flooding in the region that needs it. You are the beginning of what is needed. You have become a log in the middle of the fire, a bullet in the center of a heart.

You are reason I keep on trying, to explain the pleasure that lives in my heart. You are like a rainbow in the middle of a storm. You are the calm that doesn’t destroy.

There is a peace that rest inside you, there is a cure inside your bones. You carry a certain calmness, you provide the empty inside a home.

You are a like an angel sent from heaven… you are the reason I’m still alive.

So come to me in comfort… come to me with trust. Cause I know all about you, and I dream to learn much more. Come to me sierra.

Let me know what you want.

Want to comment on this Short Stories?
Sign up to Edit Red and you will be able to comment on Short Stories and get access to: Upload your own stories and poems, get readers and their feedback, promote your work...
Sign up






[Back to top]
Comments  
Comment by: - 2008-05-23 06:16
Add to Readers
      
I have the impression that there is an elevation of the persona to whom this piece owes its creative genesis. Repeating a word for emphasis can give a piece strength, but to direct attention away from the second person towards the feeling itself, use the word you less and the technique you used in 'middle of a fire, bullet in a heart.' that directs attention away from me and the person and onto the feeling.
Otherwise, this piece is quite gentle and reverential.
1

Sponsored Ads


By RossEan

Featured Writers

Advertising - Terms & Conditions - Short Story Submissions - Contact - Writing Competitions - Writing Links - Book Promotion - Sky-Tribe.com - alanemmins.com
  Member short stories, poems, comments and other contributions are owned by the poster.
Copyright 2003 - 2007 Edit Red I/S