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JK Sheppard
JK Sheppard
United States, Pennsylvania, Lancaster

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Within........

As I listen to the whisper of the silence through my id,
my recall ques the memories that have yet to be lived.
These thoughts that I ponder seem ever so sad,
while longing for the love I thought I never had.
Trudging in my journey, ne'er wandering in this realm,
there is a presence I sense, He is The Master of the Helm.
He is asked by the day and then He is thanked at night,
for the signs He has shone in the sharing of our plight.
He has given unto us a great purpose in this life,
to understand the other who shares the same strife.
From our minds and our hearts is where we begin, the first love is Gods love, the true love from within....

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LadyFlowers61 Comment by: LadyFlowers61 - 2008-11-05 20:52
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Not all poetry has to rhyme. This is that such poetry. I do agree with Phillmag.....since it doesn't rhyme, make the last sentence to be able to read as a spectacular ending. (like an orgasm!) That's the only way I can say it! :)
phillmag Comment by: phillmag - 2008-05-22 05:35
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Ian, i like this very much. my suggestions: consider-trudging on, and separating the last sentence into lines- ...where we begin/the first...God's love/the true.
consider these lightly

Namaste, Phill.
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