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YeOldeFart
Dennis Newman
United States, OR, Springfield

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Ennui

Sunday becomes Monday'¦
Monday becomes Tuesday,
Tuesday becomes Wednesday,
Wednesday becomes another day,
Another day becomes this day,
This day becomes yesterday,
Yesterday becomes today'¦
Today becomes any day ,
Any day becomes everyday,
Everyday becomes all days,
All days have tomorrows.
All days become yesterdays,
All days are Sundays,
Mondays, Tuesdays, Wednesdays'¦
The names don't matter.

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DavidHe Comment by: DavidHe Online- 2007-12-26 03:43
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This is really zone! No names of weekdays! Are they forgotten? No, that is no limit. I like it. Good. Great writer!
shaft Comment by: shaft - 2006-06-25 05:02
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It's very true and well written, life just becomes a series of images detached from days. It's something you seem to explore, the nature of naming (your name, days of the week) and you seem to have reached a conclusion.
Comment by: - 2006-04-16 09:10
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Just as with Ted Kooser,you are hard to "put down".
Gerard Comment by: Gerard - 2006-04-12 15:37
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My only complaint about this piece is the last line which doesn't seem to have the same tone as the other lines. I'm not suggesting you stick on an elipsis but perhaps it could be ended with a line featured previously in the poem.

Great work.
Comment by: - 2006-04-04 06:50
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This is great. Its very deceptive. At first glance it seems quite simple and easily constructed much to the contrary. The repetition works perfectly
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