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MsWizard
Alicia Wizard
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United States, WA, Seattle

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Undertow

I’ve a heart bleeding
Desperately needing
Salvation
From a chaotic
And stressful
Situation
Terrified and
Knowing I’m about
To lose the best
Thing I’ve
Ever found
All because I’ve
run aground
And sinking fast
Trapped
In murky waters

Life has
Turned into
A violent undertow
I’m been
Trying
To fight it
To hold on
To my treasure
Before it’s gone
But the weight
Is pulling me down
Like an anchor
Chained to a
Floundering ship

But I love you
I won’t take you
With me
So I set you free
Before you’re lost
In these
Tumultuous waters
And dragged out
To sea
Painfully
Needlessly
Involuntarily

You see
the rules
may say
That the captain
will have to go
Down
with the ship …

But she doesn’t
have
… to take …
… her crew
… Down …
… with her …

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MsWizard Comment by: MsWizard Online- 2008-09-14 20:45
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Yep, that's me Ron. Spilling my emotional blood for all to see! I'm glad you liked this piece~
Hakuna Comment by: Hakuna Online- 2008-09-14 18:42
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Wow Alicia. The power and beauty behind this piece will stand on it's own for years to come. It's very bold in that it exposes the heart for all to see. How many are the souls that have experienced this and can relate.

Beautiful Alicia.
YolandaRenee Comment by: YolandaRenee - 2008-06-08 07:59
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I agree very powerful and another favorite - you capture the emotion of life and the questions, situations we've all been in so very well.
brokenwing Comment by: brokenwing - 2008-05-20 12:24
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This is so relevant to my life right now that I'm considering writing something similar called either liferaft or life preserver
MsWizard Comment by: MsWizard Online- 2008-05-20 05:55
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Thank you Brokenwing...this is one piece where I deliberately tried to bring a "breathless" quality to it....
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