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The Ocean Brings Me Gifts
Waves crashing
hard into my legs
Rolling out
just as I get used
to the sensation
Leaving me
beautiful sacrifices
Wet, foamy sand
left behind
I am the witness
of such beauty
Shining adornments
as far as the eye can see
Wind whipping
through my hair
Wet footprints
burned to memory
Sun kissed cheeks
loving this entrancing place
Walking away
for the journey home
One last glance, one last wave
softly into my legs
Kind Farewell
These are the gifts
the Ocean brings me
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| this piece is very serene, the line breaks here dont give a sence of deception as in one of your other pieces i've read, but it works well, makes you pause and take a break as if resting, i also like the way the nature beauty of the landscape and the situation are described, your word choice is excellent, lovely piece, thank you for sharing, patrick. |
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Do your musical talents evoke such wondrous pleasures Bebe?
If so, I need to hear all the pieces… no kidding,
only a beautiful mind could paint with such warmth. |
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| Thanks so much....isn't the beauty of nature our one true thing we can all see so clearly....very cool that we have similar poems....Bebe |
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Comment by: pj - 2008-06-11 07:01
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| Its true that great minds think alike ( even though i dont have a great mind)you will no believe this but that i composed a poem with the exact words as your first verse but i decided not to upload it .So i can relate to this poem with the greated of ease .I love the emotions this poem invokes keep it up you are talented. |
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