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darkpoet1987
Bryant Harland
United States, MI, Davison

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For Elizabeth

I never thought it would be like this
I’d get to watch it all happen, like a dream
Wow, I never thought I’d be thinking like this
There is just something, something on my mind
You should know this something, because it’s about you
You’re beautiful, you’re intelligent.
Your smile is a legend
Your daughter, she’s pretty cute
But there is just this one thing
about you.
You’re dating an asshat
Not to say that you should go with perfect
but why settle for such a guy
when you could do so much better

Wow, I never thought it would be like this.
I was never one to get involved
especially in relationships.
I talk to you every night
and you tell me these things.
They make my heart shudder.
I just want to tell you this.
You’re dating an asshat.
You don’t have to settle
you don’t have to go for perfect
but please, for the love of god,
do better than this.
You’re dating an asshat.

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Comment by: - 2008-06-02 06:16
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Here is my super happy comment to your supper happy poem: I say if he is such an asshat you do things my way and kill the bastard....or at lest torture him till he runs. Hehe you can't say you wouldn't enjoy it!
darkpoet1987 Comment by: darkpoet1987 - 2008-05-22 10:56
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I suppose I should add some clarification for people outside of the situation. I wrote this as a joke for my friend because I don't like her boyfriend.
brokenwing Comment by: brokenwing - 2008-05-22 08:01
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A variation on the "I'm not worthy" theme. I liked the part about she "tells me things that make my heart shudder" Don't be quite so hard on yourself. She must see SOMETHING in you and she's probably not quite as perfect as you think. Perhaps she can even motivate you to be a better person ;-).
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