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easywriter58
Janyce Van Es
United States, Texas, Pottsboro

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Did You Hear That? (wee challenge 36)

While Janyce relaxed in a bathtub of fragrant oils, she heard grinding sounds behind the ceramic tiles making its way across the wall.

When her husband returned from work, she said, "There's scary noises behind the bathtub wall. Sound's like something chewing."

They quietly sneaked into the bathroom, hoping to hear the noise. The room remained quiet.

Two days later, the sounds returned. Janyce refused to take a bath and took sponge baths using the kitchen sink.

The next week, while Janyce placed plates on the dining table, the chandelier above started shaking. A sliding noise moved across the ceiling. It frightened her so she phoned an exterminator.

Her husband didn’t hear anything in the bathroom or watch the chandelier move so he thought his wife was bullsh*ting. He ignored her.

As they lay in bed, both heard a strange whiffing noise above their heads.

Two days later the exterminator climbed down from the attic, gripping an eight-foot Boa Constrictor, “Boy, he was well fed! There is rat dung everywhere but no rats.”

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karjon Comment by: karjon - 2008-06-01 13:40
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Eeeeow - it doesn't bear thinking about. Though I do hate rats. Hmmm - nah, I'd rather have the rats.

One query: Sound's like something chewing." - that apostrophe - I'm assuming you mean to contract 'It sounds', in which case there's no apostrophe. But, if you meant to contract 'Sound is like' (though that's a wee bit clumsy) the apostrophe would be in the right place.

This is just me again, isn't? I'll shut up.

Enjoyed it, Janyce, even though it gave me the creeps. Thanks for the read.


Cheers

Karen
vlclasby Comment by: vlclasby - 2008-05-29 10:04
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Holy crap! I'm afraid to ask if this is real, because it probably is!
Janyce- you have a most interesting, and probably dangerous life. I don't think I could share a house with rats or snake.
Mick Comment by: Mick Online- 2008-05-29 02:09
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ol, Janyce this is so great... The image of a couple in bed with an eight-foot Boa Constrictor, over head, left me thinking of the places I have slept and things I may of shared the night with. We use to wake in the night from the whimpering screams of something having the life squeezed out of it back in our old house. Thanks mate. :)
frees340 Comment by: frees340 Online- 2008-05-27 20:11
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wow. cut and dry and to the point. very boom boom. its nice.
also, i was sick of these things last summer.
krademacher Comment by: krademacher Online- 2008-05-27 16:15
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Cute. Can we keep him/her/it? Beats having a cat around (especially if you're allergic).

ahem... I think my wife would have dug a hole in the wall (or made me do it) after the first noise. Good one Janyce.
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