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Where did you hear that?
I sat down to work at 9:02 when a plump woman dressed entirely in orange appeared at my desk.
“You are going to be out of a job soon.” She extended her hand. “I’m Fantasia. New editor. You’re Dave. Know all about you.” She winked and tapped her nose.
Eyebrows raised, forehead scrunched, I shook her hand. “Out of a job? Where did you hear that?”
“Didn’t hear, felt it.” Again with the nose tapping. “Check out my art. I have to warn you I can’t draw, I just channel energy and release it. I’m very intuitive. Remind me to plot out your life map later.”
I gulped. She flipped through her book of sketches.
“That's an African man. Might need to turn it upside down. That one is my spiritual savior. I can feel them around you.”
My eyes leapt for the clock. 9:03.
I had to hand it to this woman, she spoke nothing but the truth—she couldn’t draw, and I needed to find a new job.
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Comment by: DavidHe Online- 2008-07-04 06:18
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| A very good story! Well done! I hope you can comment on my works too. Looking forward to hearing from you. Best wishes. |
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Thanks so much for the interest and advice.
It pained me to remove the "..." coz I wanted to give the feeling of when you open your mouth to talk, but are interupted...but now that I cut it, I see it reads much better, thanks Karen and Lee.
Glad you "felt" this woman and let's pray you never have to meet her.
For those interested, the woman has now quit her job in my office. I must have been sending all my positive energy in the right direction, huh?
Hallelujah!! (Yes, that is a DOUBLE exclamation mark, Karen) |
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| Very good, good take, too. I saw this woman complete and fully hewn. I think it's the perfect use of the word 'entirely' that opened up and rounded out the whole character. This is a description I shall remember. |
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Comment by: karjon Online- 2008-06-01 13:14
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What a bizarre woman - you've drawn the character well and I enjoyed this wee one.
I agree with Lee on the "..." being a distraction - I'd definitely cut them.
Thanks for the read.
Cheers
Karen |
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Heck, I'd see her as a challenge: who can drive each other out first. "Hey HR, this lady threatened me!"
heh heh.
Good one Mitch, you had me riding right along. |
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