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fang13bea
Hayley McNichol
United States, Michigan, Farwell

Words: 160
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Window panes.
Do you see them?

Good, now can you see the glass forming in between them?

Okay, what do you see outside the window?

That won't do, I want you to see a city landscape.

Excellent.
Now I want you to see walls.
White walls.

Good, good.
Now see the rest of the room.
I want you to see a long conference table, and swiveling chairs.

Okay, now you need to see people.
Greedy, stuffy, bigoted faces.
They are all staring at you.

Now put this room in a building.

What floor are you on?

Now that won't do, you need to be higher.
About thirty floors higher.

Good, good.
Now, I want you to focus your attention back on the window.
How big is it?

Bigger, make the whole wall a window.

Okay, now here's what I want you to do, I want you to run towards the window and break through the glass.

Excellent.

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DavidHe Comment by: DavidHe - 2008-08-08 20:21
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A specail style. Well done. I would like to learn from you. Best wishes.
frees340 Comment by: frees340 Online- 2008-05-26 19:56
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To me, this is a brilliant work of dialogue without form. Its great. I'm putting it in my library. Hayley, love, if you are half as beauteous as this piece, I'm enraptured.
Rusty N Comment by: Rusty N - 2008-05-23 13:16
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Chilling. The anger shows through clearly.
Arley Comment by: Arley - 2008-05-23 12:21
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Hahaha, very clever piece, Hayley! Really enjoyed it.
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