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alcarty
Al Carty
United States, New Mexico, Milan

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Out of Sight

“You’ve got to forget her,” my friends said. “You’re better off without her. Put it behind you.” The platitudes they offered to soothe my broken heart.

After several years of happiness I began to see the subtle little signs, the slight indifference, her mental wandering when I was speaking. Then came the weight-loss, the change of style in hair and clothes, the makeover; wrong numbers late at night.

So my attractive wife packed her new clothes in her new luggage and departed while I was working. The note was not a great surprise, for I had, one night, listened on the extension, and learned where they would rendezvous. A few dollars to the motel clerk, a microphone beside the bed, and they had no secrets from me.

Now, when my friends offer sympathies I smile gamely. And I will forget. Out of sight, out of mind. And my wife and her friend are out of sight. Only my new friend, Amy, the motel clerk, and I know where. Amy loves her new clothes and luggage.

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alcarty Comment by: alcarty - 2008-06-30 08:23
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David, those are very flattering words. If I had the ability to help you, I certainly would. Thanks for reading.
DavidHe Comment by: DavidHe - 2008-06-29 17:20
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Wow, Alcarty, I have come to love your special writing style. It is hard for me to say whichever it is, but I really want to follow it if you like to teach me. Looking forward to hearing from you. Best wishes.
alcarty Comment by: alcarty - 2008-06-01 14:59
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Your challenges are really taking me where wives should fear to tread. I'm becoming something of an expert on spousal disappearance. Now, where did I put my wife? Thanks, Karen.
karjon Comment by: karjon - 2008-06-01 12:28
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Excellent, Al - no crits from me. Love the ending.

Cheers

Karen
alcarty Comment by: alcarty - 2008-05-31 11:00
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Karl, you and Wanda convinced me. The edit looks better. Thanks.
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