WEE CHALLENGE #36 - OUT OF SIGHT (175)
“Where is Heaven?”
“Way up in the sky somewhere.”
“Is Daddy comin’ home?”
“He can’t come home, Monica.”
“I want to send Daddy a birthday card.”
“I’m not sure—”
“I know he'll get it. Will you take me to the store?”
“What makes you so sure?”
“I had a dream last night.”
“Finish breakfast.” She couldn’t disappoint her.
Monica ate every crumb. Maggie got her keys and they were off.
* * *
“Read this one, Momma.”
It says, “HAPPY BIRTHDAY to someone special, far away.”
“It’s perfect for Daddy.”
The clerk prepared the Mylar balloon, taping the ribbon around the envelope. Maggie clutched the receipt with renewed hope. Hand-in-hand, the two walked out into the sunshine.
Monica hugged and kissed the balloon, then released it. They watched it rise out of sight. Monica bounced with glee, “He got it, Momma; Daddy’s gunna have a happy birthday!”
Maggie hugged her daughter. “Let’s get ice-cream—
* * *
Maggie read the PERSONAL to Monica:
"Hi, Monica. I got your card. Love, Daddy."
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| Thanks, Anna. Appreciate your comment. Janet |
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| Hi, Janet, this is lovely, very bittersweet. |
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Hi Vickie, sorry about the mascara, but that's exactly the reaction I was hoping for. Thanks for commenting.
Karen, thanks for the comma. Proofing my own stuff proves to be one of those see what you expect to see ventures. Your comment and correction are appreciated. Janet |
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Comment by: karjon - 2008-06-01 12:15
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Aw, ah wee sweet one, Janet.
You need a comma before 'Momma' in “He got it Momma - no other crits that I can see.
Thanks for the read.
Cheers
Karen |
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Comment by: vlclasby Online- 2008-06-01 09:33
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| Well, thanks VERY much Janet for making my mascara run. Very sweet wee story. Great dialogue, and a very tender sentiment. Very nice. |
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