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kpotter
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United States, montana, Bozeman

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Opposing Void

Opposing Void

At our weekly call,
I notice his voice
is not so strong as the last…
when after a day of seven triumphant runs,
cruised from top to base and
again with strength in knees
and fresh air in lungs,
a memory of his youth relived.
In his soul he felt, I am doing well!

This week, conversation is not proud.
A year-old sorrow diminishes spirit,
quiets voice, subdues joy.
In youthful spite I face sorrow as an enemy.
In surrendered age, he has little need to fight.

It threatens him less,
he knows his age,
healthy now but not so long
till he lay beside her under the trees.
I have no plot to my name.
I’ve many years ahead,
I cannot spend them all dreaming of
and crying for the dead.

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BillQ Comment by: BillQ Online- 2008-09-20 11:16
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conveys the perspective of age and youth nicely. I particularly enjoy the last 2 lines of the second stanza.

thank you.
Harris3dgn Comment by: Harris3dgn - 2008-06-24 17:36
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Nor would he want you to I imagine. Not much I can say about this poem, as it wasn't written for me.

I can say that your use of language rolls from the tongue easily.
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