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chelseyam
Chelsey Cheesecake
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Sunday mornings age 10 1/2

The alarm sounds early Sunday morning

Gotta dress right, the utmost importance

Chubby hands, dismal eyes

Sigh to the mirror, self esteem suicide

Two hour sermon, squirm and doodle

Old ladies gossip in high pitched whispers

They stare at those who dont meet fashions restrictions

Disdain, judgement, hatred

Old men wish they hadnt followed their wives there

They think of the beer waiting for them at home

Roast dinners and football games, evening priorities

Longing, dreaming, dying

I hold onto that old white Bible, flip through the pages

Granny got it for me, her body filled with Cancer

I put it on the shelf and accepted the new one with the fancy case

Hoping for acceptance and care, no love

Hoping for love and admitting it now

Needing to escape the fears of Jesus Christ

Of death and where Im heading when it happens

Keep the time, every second, cause

Sunday mornings always turned to Sunday afternoons

When the entire experience would be thrown to the wind

And I could change back into myself again

Boys clothes and rough housing, lets play rodeo.

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bigfiction Comment by: bigfiction - 2008-06-02 13:52
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This brought me back to the old women showing up with their impossibly permed hair and their knee length skirts and matching jackets (always some horrible color like sea foam green.)

I remember white tights and black mary janes half a size too small.

Chubby hands, dismal eyes
Sigh to the mirror, self esteem suicide

Personally, I love those two lines. I think it describes perfectly the weekly torture a kid is put through to put on your Sunday best.
driftersonline Comment by: driftersonline - 2008-05-30 23:10
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Excellent. Reminds me of why I get so drunk when someone dies.
So I have an excuse not to attend.
chelseyam Comment by: chelseyam - 2008-05-25 17:58
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The chubby hands bit is to imply that no matter how I was dressed the chubby hands would always be something to mess up the flow of appearance. They are a symbol of my childhood just like the rest of the piece, thats why I added in the bit about self-esteem suicide. You cant escape physical appearance even if you are dressed just right, so there is always something for the old women to gossip about. The entire experience is in left field, it shouldnt have happened.
Wildefriend Comment by: Wildefriend Online- 2008-05-25 17:48
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Interesting perceptions and images. I would lose the "chubby hands" comment. It impedes the forward movement and adds nothing to the entire effect. It's like out of left field.

Otherwise, very good. :-)
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