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| Brief, quiet, gentle...XLNT! |
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Wonderful imagery! I've just come back from holiday, and this is how i looked at the clouds while on my back in a swimming pool! Making pictures from clouds is one of my favourite things, a bit like reading tea leaves i'm sure!
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| Great build up at the end. I enjoyed it for being an abstract poem. It was brief, but you created a good enough image to think about for awhile. |
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Comment by: Arley - 2008-06-12 08:09
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| Very good, Mick! "Grazing on a patch of blue" to depict the clouds already gives the image of sheep, and you really crystalize it with the next line. |
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Comment by: Juan2 - 2008-06-09 19:26
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Really enjoyed this, it is a fun one to picture in the mind's eye while reading... brings about the same sort of make-the-shapes-what-you-want feeling that one gets when cloud gazing. It's both playful and beautiful, well done.
Especially liked "upwind of migration" - great way of getting that travelling/movement across
happy writings. |
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