writing community
Sign In Here | Lost Password | FREE Sign Up
E-mail: Password:
Remember login  
The place for writers:
Upload your writing in minutes, receive peer feedback from other writers, poets, authors, then get your work published out there in the real world.       Learn how other writers are doing it.

 
frees340
Vyasar Ganesan
Online
United States, TX, Austin

Words: 335
Access: Public
Comments: 1

Forward to a friend
Print Version
E-mail this writer E-mail this user 
View Author profile
Add to Readers  




I'll Be a While

Standing up, he smoothes down the front of his silk shirt. Those draconic wrinkles fade and vanish under his firm pressure, against the skin and body hairs, the fat and muscle, the ribs, and the goopity-goop inside.

With a smile that says he’s coming back, he leaves the disk of a table for the safer, more appealing comforts of the public restroom. His powerful legs carry him across the smoky, dimly lit room, around calmly smoldering hipsters, the gentle cummerbund-wearing collegiate, and dull, droll servers. He vanishes into the door, crudely marked ‘mail,’ releasing the combined smells of hash, cigarettes, urine, and fecal matter into the already fetid room.

Lights grow darker, then lighter as the night breaks to day. People file out, a few in groups of three or more, but the majority in pairs, fingers entwined or probing more doubtful depths. Coffees grow cold, then frigid, while beers rot and turn a rusty shade of dun. A surprising amount of garbage is left in the wake of the customers: an orange peel in a chipped martini glass, several torn and stained stockings, all piled on top of each other, a rag doll with a sausage stuffed in its mouth, and a neon pink sign reading something in Russian.

Its about this time he leaves the bathroom, a stumbling, filthy flicker of a man. There was once sincerity behind his eyes, a warm caring for the other, now replaced with laughter and recklessness. The dragons are rampant across his chest, and make him look creased, withered, older. As he gets closer, the smell of garbage and perfumes shoves its way through the omnipresent odorous cloud in the joint. A light print of a pair of gossamer lips makes a stitch from his cheek, down his neck, and descending into his shirt.

He smiles, oblivious to the time, the feelings, the emptiness. He can only look expectantly, awaiting a silent car ride back to his loft, where the clock is always on sleepy time.

Want to comment on this Flash Fiction?
Sign up to Edit Red and you will be able to comment on Flash Fiction and get access to: Upload your own stories and poems, get readers and their feedback, promote your work...
Sign up






[Back to top]
Comments  
jgilgun Comment by: jgilgun - 2008-05-30 20:44
Add to Readers
      
HM. This is a vivid portrait of despair. Makes me realize how important it is to attend to details of my life, like cleaning the bathroom, and then figuring out how to share my deeper self. Life is full of longing, it seems.
1

Sponsored Ads


By frees340

Featured Writers

Advertising - Terms & Conditions - Short Story Submissions - Contact - Writing Competitions - Writing Links - Book Promotion - Sky-Tribe.com - alanemmins.com
  Member short stories, poems, comments and other contributions are owned by the poster.
Copyright 2003 - 2007 Edit Red I/S