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| Very cool poem! The imagery really underscores how strongly he is moved by her. |
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Hey, sweet "whiskey mouth". I like that breath/taste when it's fresh and new. Later, with the stomach going bad, it's disgusting.
Strong. |
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I should of made it more generic by changing wild turkey to bourbon.
O'well
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| ive been chased by a turkey, theyre nasty buggars. australia doesnt have to be capital,maybe theres a point being made. amerika. america. nevermind. nice one drift. |
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Comment by: jgilgun - 2008-05-30 21:25
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| I like it. A touch of humor and the wonderful description of the rush and the word play is fun, too. |
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