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nonalienabductee
Niccole Segura
United States, Pennsylvania/Ohio

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Reunion

“I can’t believe it’s you!”

“Feels like forever since I've seen you.”

“Come here, lemme give you a hug.”

“S-sure.”

“Mmm. . . um. Um. Hey, Jack.”

“What?”

“You can—um. Can you let me go now, please?”

“Oh. Yeah. Sorry. Daydreamed for a second there.”

“Oookay. But, hey, how are you doing?”

“Fine. Fine. How are you?”

“I’m great! I got a great job, and Paul and I are doing really well.”

“Oh.”

“What’s wrong?”

“You’re still—you’re still seeing Paul?”

“Two years next month!”

“. . . Congratulations.”

“What about you? Anybody special?”

“. . . No.”

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troyarn Comment by: troyarn Online- 2008-06-13 15:06
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Ouch! I understood this perfectly and you never had to describe anything. Very good use of dialogue to show the scene. This whole idea is very appealing and I think I will give it a shot sometime.
Again, very good work. Thanks for posting it.
nurseytonya Comment by: nurseytonya - 2008-06-07 14:14
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awesome. it's so obvious he is still in love with her. very great job!
qpeedore Comment by: qpeedore Online- 2008-06-04 14:27
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The lack of description does this piece good. I think that extra words would make the whole thing less effective. It's a great exchange of words between the two, and obviously there has been some romantic history between them.

The good thing about dialogue is that you don't have to follow the rules of grammar or anything! You can just...write.
foxportions549 Comment by: foxportions549 - 2008-06-02 18:42
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That was a pretty good read, and you didn't even use any description! Lovely! :D
MaggieMay Comment by: MaggieMay - 2008-05-31 21:14
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I like the scene you created. There is a bunch of tension. It is very effective!
You did much with so little words.
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