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anitak
anita Kalyan-paul
United Kingdom, Northampton

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thoughts

Thoughts

The hardest thing I ever did, the hardest things that I do,
Is to think each day about this life, to question each day through and through.
I cant understand if this is a test, or maybe its all just a game,
All I seem to know is this that at time I feel like Im crazy, slightly insane.
My state of mind, is like a year, mixed so full of season.
Sometimes its clear, sometime so warm, sometimes it feels like treason.
I dont understand yet my hands seem to speak the thoughts that fall from my mind,
At times Im an angel, at times Im a bitch, yet I mean not to be so unkind.
I think its simple, see the truth is this, my mind is a turmoil, a storm,
So my suggestion is this, I will give you a start, I will let you know, let you be informed.
At times a disease my touch can be, at time an angel so true,
Yet like Jeykel and Hyde, my anger a wrath, my love like a diamond shines through.
And now again I realise my state, I begin to talk like a riddle,
I will wake in the morning and read these words and upon myself I will giggle.
So now I will go or I will not stop, see my mind is like a bottomless pit,
See literally Il talk, of confusion and hurt, you'l eventually get bored of my shit!!
So good day to you, good night again, for the time I do not know,
Enjoy what there is, each second of life, for tommorrow will come and will go.

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Fantasywriter1 Comment by: Fantasywriter1 - 2008-08-23 18:45
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I really enjoyed this poem. However I aggree with wildefriend in that, this is very close to not being a poem, almost short story or prose. However, I was able to overlook that tiny fact because your writing was very desxcriptive and detailed. Good poem.
Lucid Comment by: Lucid - 2008-07-25 17:11
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This is poetry in it's purest form. It is a piece that is not artificial, as some others can be. I liked your poem because it has meaning, and most of all it tells the truth about your nature. This is something many are afraid to do. By the way read my story A Love Story in Italy. Thanks. Again I liked your poem very much.
Wildefriend Comment by: Wildefriend Online- 2008-06-12 22:47
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This is very close to not being a poem. There need to be many more significant images that illustrate the matters you discuss. Unless you use that method to grab the reader's mind, to make him or her see things, and in that way illustrate your point--this is all just creative typing. I sense that is not your intent. Maybe just take the whole thing from the beginning and find ways to visually illustrate your words. I think that's the ticket!

;-)
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Mr Botsch Comment by: Mr Botsch - 2008-06-09 18:58
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haha,i like this.i have an image of a person flipping a coin deciding whether or not to be good or bad.one thing that people lack in poetry writing and thats imagery,i see all the images in this piece.check out some of my poems(im new here,sob)great work!
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