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phillmag
phillip maguire
United States, pa., middletown

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To the Point

isqueezedmythoughts
intoaball
aballsosmall
itwashardly
aballatall
butjustapoint.

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WLC Comment by: WLC - 2008-06-23 19:40
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Do you just sit over there in PA thinking up ways to throughly amuse me? Remember our conversation about children's books. I'm telling you! You could make a mint at it! This is just as whimsical as it gets. And down right educational too. Fun fun fun. Thanks Phil!
Arley Comment by: Arley - 2008-06-12 08:04
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Clever, clever, clever, Phil!
alien Comment by: alien - 2008-06-07 08:55
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It might have been nice, actually to have the lines diminishing in length so that the word point (or part of it) stood by itself at the end...

isqueezedmythoughtsintoaball
aballsosmall
itwashardly
aballatall
butjusta
point
.

who knows?

Brilliant. :)
alien Comment by: alien - 2008-06-07 08:55
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I like this approach a lot. I can't say I've never seen it before but I've never seen the technique applied so appropriately to its subject as this is.

I really love it.

Brilliant. :)
babylonboy Comment by: babylonboy - 2008-06-06 17:28
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sweet little kernal of a random spark. like a thought that passes rapidly behind your eyes.
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