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JUST THE TWO OF US
It’s just you and me tonight
In you I believe
You are here when nobody else cares
Always listening to what I have to say
If I was to leave this place
Nobody would notice my absence
I am not even a number, a digit
Nor a barcode
In this cold world
But you, you make me smile again
If only it would last a bit longer
If only we didn’t have to wake up
And face the world again the next morning
Ice cubes gently caressing the glass
So divine, so beautiful
If only that was my reality
In you, I find all the comfort I need
No other offers exist
You have got the monopoly going
I am not complaining, nor am I resisting
It’s just me and the glass tonight
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Comment by: kc0003 Online- 2008-08-23 22:57
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| this is a fine effort...nicely done |
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| Mmhmm, this one I like very much... you cracked it with the ice cubes me dear. ;) |
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Comment by: Jorbian - 2008-06-23 23:05
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| I loved this. I loved how you were able to so skillfully hide what you were actually saying until the last moment. Marvelous. |
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| "Its just me and the glass tonight"- you said it. I dont blame you. xx |
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Comment by: Argento - 2008-06-05 16:54
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| Great poem, but sad. I like the free form style that you used, seperating each idea with every stanza, too. I especially liked the bit about the ice cubes and your alternate ideal reality. |
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