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Informal Grae
Graeme Sandford
United Kingdom, HAMPSHIRE, Totton

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Passion's Poisoned Path - Wee Challenge #37

"Tis a wild, crooked way, my dear."

"But I must go there to see him once more."

"Many a young girl has made the attempt, my sweet."

"And never seen again?"

"Not in this land, my angel."

"Does he cast his magic often?"

"Sometimes many close together, othertimes years and none are called, my precious."

"When the last?"

"Winter Solstice gone, a girl, like yourself, left this world for his domain, my pretty."

"And she went willingly?"

"With a warmth in her heart and songs upon her lips, my dainty."

"I shall die if I do not see him, so seek him I must, may my wish be granted."

"You shall find out your worthiness in time, my child."

"Farewell."

"Fare thee well, my offering."


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karjon Comment by: karjon - 2008-06-25 05:46
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Oooooh - who is 'he'? I'm sure my lack of folklore knowledge is letting me down here.

Loved the tone of this, Grae. One wee niggle:

"When the last?" - missing a 'was'?

Thanks for the read - it's so atmospheric, almost lulling me into wanting to meet 'him'.

Cheers

Karen
lilgoldenray Comment by: lilgoldenray - 2008-06-07 16:45
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mmm I love fantasy stories with old english... This was almost poetic... really liked it... good work...
Arley Comment by: Arley - 2008-06-07 08:23
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Excellent, Graeme! As said, all those differing terms of endearment makes for a nice contrast to "my offering". Great punch!!
easywriter58 Comment by: easywriter58 - 2008-06-06 19:22
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Gee-what an awakening at the end! Haha-loved the endearing terms you used. Oops, did someone else say that?

...and to think I saw "King Kong" agaom on TV a couple of weeks ago.
nivipooh Comment by: nivipooh - 2008-06-06 14:00
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The message is so strong, I simply loved it. The endearings are so rightly used. If this is a contest may you win it.
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"Myths From The Mists Of Time"

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There was a time when knights travelled the land in search of...

Visit that time again in these five works from the mind of informal grae.

Enter upon a small quest in anticipation of strange adventures to behold.






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