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Informal Grae
Graeme Sandford
United Kingdom, HAMPSHIRE, Totton

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A Little Problem? - Wee Challenge #37

"Oh, it's nothing."

Her eyes told a different story.

"If you want to talk, you know where I am."

Her smile was thin, strained. She mouthed a 'thanks' to me, then left.

I stood gazing after her, remembering the bright, bubbly character from last Summer. She'd told me quietly our moment was over, without reason or rhyme. I'd let her go, not man enough to fight; unable, unwilling, to grasp at her free spirit, defy her need to flit as a butterfly from place to place, person to person.

I never saw her again.

And at her funeral, amidst the false joy of people praising her life, I found the hollow space in my soul cried louder than I ever could.


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icy Comment by: icy - 2008-08-07 08:25
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Awwww, that's so sad. :-(
karjon Comment by: karjon Online- 2008-06-25 06:32
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It made me cry, too.

Beautifully done, Grae. Any nits I would pick have been pointed out by Lee, so I'll say no more.

Cheers

Karen
Mick Comment by: Mick - 2008-06-17 02:57
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Love it Grae... So sad and so well written... Lovin your work. :)
krademacher Comment by: krademacher - 2008-06-12 19:26
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Wow, man. Powerful. That last line is killer. Only one bit threw me:

"...skit as a butterfly..." [skit as a verb just causes me to go "huh?" Perhaps replacing that word (or all four words noted) with "flit" would work]
GarethCB Comment by: GarethCB - 2008-06-11 02:11
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A very moving story. Free spirits always seem to have their dark side. This really shows up just how devastating such a loss can be.
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