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On the Rocks and a Hard Place
“Are you trying to get me drunk so you can take advantage of me?”
“We just met, sweetheart. I’d never dream of such a thing.”
“Good, because I prefer gentlemen.”
“And I a true lady.”
“Well, come give this lady a kiss.”
“Mmm, your lips are divine.”
“As are yours.”
“Come closer, sweetie. Sit on my lap, let me drink you in.”
“With pleasure.”
“Mmm… oh… umm… sweetie, do you mind shifting a bit. Whatever’s in your pocket is really digging into my thigh.”
“Of course, of course. But I should tell you: my dress doesn’t actually have any pockets.”
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Comment by: - 2008-07-15 18:39
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| this funny and good |
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Comment by: Juan2 - 2008-07-10 13:21
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Thanks all for the reads + comments. Yeah, this was just one of those silly scenarios that pop into your head from time to time. Glad it was enjoyable.
oh and thanks niccole, gonna use that instead - it does feel more 'real'
happy writings. |
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| Wha! Crazy creepy. Also crazy fun. This is a wonderful piece of dialogue. Not clumsy, not trying to jam it all in. Wonderfully brilliant. Thanks for sharing. |
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Ha ha ha! That really is hilarious. A lovely and well-revealed secret. I like the purposefully artificial, arch dialogue, with one exception--
“Good, because I prefer gentleman.”
“And I a true lady.”
The original lines seem a bit too forced to me, for some reason. This is something different--feel free to consider or ignore at your pleasure.
Thanks for writing! |
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Oh, to have been a fly on the wall when that last bit of info was disseminated...
Truly a classic! |
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