A little Problem-Wee Story #37
“So, what have you got to say for yourself, young man?”
“I’m entitled to my freedom of expression."
“Graffiti is not freedom of expression. It’s sheer vandalism. You’ll understand that one day, should you ever buy a shop and get it tagged.”
“No one condemns the Egyptians for tagging the Pyramids.”
“Hieroglyphs and Graffiti are worlds apart.”
“I told her I was sorry,”
“Be that as it may, every action must have its consequence.”
“It was really humiliating, everyone laughed at me. Even my mates.”
“You got no less than you deserved…now hold still”
Alexander wept bitterly as Victoria gently removed the felt-tip aphorisms that Mrs. Patterson had scripted all over his arms, legs and forehead.
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Comment by: karjon - 2008-06-26 15:04
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Ooooh, Mrs Patterson must be strong and dettermined - but good for her, eh?
Nice one, Les.
Thanks for the read.
Cheers
Karen |
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Comment by: chocca2 - 2008-06-12 13:27
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Hehe. I enjoyed this, especially the end. I didn't see it coming; Mrs Patterson sounds a kooky old woman.
Thanks for the read. |
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| Ha! sucks to be him. With regard to the young tagger getting caught, maybe you could toss in somewhere that he passed out drunk, or tripped on the getaway, or maybe the old lady dropped him with a right hook. |
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And the lesson is: never wear shorts and short sleeves when tagging!
Well done, Les!
About the only quibble I've got is the first part of the dialogue,the "young man" bit - to my mind, this is more a male expression, but at the end it's "Victoria". Very minor, but probably hard to adjust in this length and using dialogue.
As for the script - permanent or washable markers? BTW, most taggers use spraycans - surpring how well they can control the flow! |
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nicely written but the ending just seemed a little too stretched. any taggers i know would know would not have hung around while some old lady wrote all over them.
good take on the idea of poetic justice, though |
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