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Splash me with Ceridwyn’s brew
That I might gain knowledge
Of your hidden intentions
Or perhaps change shape
Conformant to yours
This world perplexes me
How do I gain entrance?
Must I charm the way?
My violin Orpheus’ harp?
But discovered,
Might I be set adrift?
Left to the mercy
Of volatile seas
In a leather bed
What choice do I have?
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I really enjoyed reading this and I agree with phillmag. I think it would come out a bit more cohesive if you combined the two, then let the last sentence stand alone. I feel it would make more of an impact.
