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chocca2
Natalie Omany
United Kingdom

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A little Problem - wee challenge #37

“Uh oh.”

“What? What is it?”

“Err, it’s nothing really.”

“Nothing? That didn’t sound like nothing to me. What’s wrong?”

“Calm down.”

“Don’t tell me to calm down.”

“Okay, okay. I’ll tell you. You really do need to calm down though…and maybe not move around too much.”

“Oh for god’s sake, tell me.”

“Okay. But try to …just don’t move.”

“Shit. What is it? Is it big? Where? Oh God, get it off me.”

“Don’t worry. Just concentrate on keeping still.”

“Easy for you to say, you don’t have a big…What the hell is it?”

“I wouldn’t say big, compared to you, it’s quite little.”

“Please, just get if off.”

“Okay, on the count of three. You ready?”

“Do it.”

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karjon Comment by: karjon - 2008-06-27 04:27
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Excellent, Natalie - thoroughly enjoyed that one. Favourite line: “I wouldn’t say big, compared to you, it’s quite little.”

How big is the thing? Hehe...

Thanks for the read.

Cheers

Karen
SusanCulver Comment by: SusanCulver - 2008-06-15 19:28
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Fabulous, Natalie... Reminds me of a nasty orange spider that went cruising across my desk this afternoon. I think if it'd been on me, I probably would have passed out...
pseudonym Comment by: pseudonym - 2008-06-13 16:12
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This really is so much fun to read.
Definetly caught my attention!!
Lee Lacuna Comment by: Lee Lacuna - 2008-06-12 14:38
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Flowed very smoothly, Natalie. Well done.
chocca2 Comment by: chocca2 - 2008-06-12 12:50
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Wow, thank you so much for all your comments. It was a fun dialog piece to write even though I actually don't like many creepy crawlies. So glad you enjoyed!
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