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SusanCulver
Susan Culver
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(Fear of) Colors

Or else the fading. Morning, still imperfect, in spite of that fragile sun.

And all the things we no longer talk about. That we stick our hands in our pockets, smile our way through the lines.

Weeks with an ache in my chest; with the hole you left in my dreams. That the experts would call this escalation. Like the downed plane. The new year. Another few thousand kids with iPods and dog tags. With that same ferocious faith.

Like sidewalk chalk and your crooked rainbow. How, years later, you finally figured out what you were missing.



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darkeyedstare Comment by: darkeyedstare - 2008-08-02 10:14
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Found beauty in the lost moments of relationships that are over, and yet not ended. And then exquiste sadness of future revelations of what you had, and what might have been.
Beautiful.
Phillozofee Comment by: Phillozofee - 2008-07-01 02:09
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The disappointment and hurt generated by an unfulfilled relationship, certainly can turn our coloured world into a numbingly grey scaled realm.

Very metaphorically descriptive and poignant write!

Phill
Harris3dgn Comment by: Harris3dgn - 2008-06-24 17:41
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"Ipods and dog tags." Interesting equation. Seperation by technology juxtaposed with lack of communication in a relationship, not bad.
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