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nonalienabductee
Niccole Segura
United States, Pennsylvania/Ohio

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The Big Man

He was so big he left
shadows on the plains,
so tremendous he
(You should have seen it!
You should have seen it)
played chess with elephants
and breathed in the clouds with a great
WHOOSH!
And they say—they say
he drank up all the rain
so they could grow corn in the sun
and he carved rivers
with the tip of his tongue.
One time
(on a bet)
he dragged Australia around the world,
splashing in the ocean like
it was a puddle, he did,
and he brewed beer in the Grand Canyon—
gave every man in the world
a sip, did the big man—
they loved him.

Then he tripped and stepped on
a little boy
(tears like lakes)
and they said—they said—
they said he couldn’t be the big man
anymore, he was
too big to be walkin’ around,
how ‘bout he leave everybody be?

And he—he—he—
didn’t look big no more
not big, but clumsy,
like some kinda ogre,
and they all drew back from him,
the monstrous man.

So he climbed the mountains,
balanced on the peaks,
and he jumped into the sky
(You should have seen it!
You should have!)
with an look you’d hope to never know,
like all the world was cracking
‘cause of you.
It was all the grief ever grown by anybody.

The big man—the too big man—
well, he never came back,
and there don’t seem to be any big men
anymore.

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JohnnySodoff Comment by: JohnnySodoff - 2008-06-22 12:23
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Yes! Your stuff is always so enchanting to me and complete with a certain dark quarkiness. The last stanza makes me wonder if this holds a slightly deeper meaning. Hmm...
easywriter58 Comment by: easywriter58 - 2008-06-21 12:33
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Now that's different from anything I have read from you. Looks like a children's story or a song with the repetitious lines. I think the giant needs more description-but that's my opinion. I don't agree with the take on beer-maybe clean water or punch.

The fact he stepped on a little boy is a bit disturbing.

In my stories, if it wasn't too offensive (as I write a lot of horror) I would have gross details of what that little boy looked like afterwards. Glad you didn't do that.
Comment by: - 2008-06-21 08:55
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The persona reminds me of an old western myth - Paul Bunyan and his big blue ox. The myth is so hyperbolised that it becomes funny, being so out of the ordinary.
Imaginings such as these can become legends. We lose our imagination when others become our memory, our source of imagining. Keep writing...
mitra Comment by: mitra - 2008-06-20 21:42
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interesting
Wildefriend Comment by: Wildefriend Online- 2008-06-20 16:03
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This is a fantastic fantasy, splendidly filled with provocative images, great language. From the top of the world to Shrek in one easy lesson. It's wonderfully funny too! ;-) FC
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