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Harris3dgn
Scott Harris
United States, North Carolina, Raleigh

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Percussion of the Crowd

Strolling in the middle
Streetlights, fiberglass
Steel and concrete surround
Echoing, persistent, loud
The footsteps of the crowd

Each has their own destination
Preordained locations
Mysterious strangers
Lovers and haters, playing
Making no sound

Out of luck, out of time
You just might hear someone
Crash their symbols, loud

Crying out to be heard
Crying out in a tan sea
Crying out in the crowd

The tan sea
It drowns out all sound
We walk in a sea
That drowns out all sound

Invisible beaters
Steady the streets
Arrhythmic heartbeats fade
In the bass rhythm
Life lay’s down

Melodious individuals
Dropping ghost strokes
Lamenting consistency
Of scales and beats
They’re bound to repeat

Out of luck, out of time
You might just hear someone
Crash their symbols, loud

Crying to be heard
Crying out in a sea of tan
Crying out in a crowd

The tan sea
It drowns out all sound
We walk in a sea
That drowns out all sound

March, March, March
To the funeral procession sound
Playing, singing, screaming
Drowning sea of tan
Percussion of the crowd

© Scott Harris, 2008

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pennyroyal Comment by: pennyroyal - 2008-06-25 03:16
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i love it. it's like those poems that people do in coffie houses where you where the weird hats and there's cig smoke all oer the place and instead of clapping you snap your fingers. Love the feel and tone. good job
Haven Sake Comment by: Haven Sake - 2008-06-22 18:37
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This was amazing to imagine in my head, thanks to your writing. It's kinda funny, whenever always relate the chaos cities or crowds to percussion so it was neat to see you lay it all out like that. Very intriguing poem, thanks!
DavidHe Comment by: DavidHe Online- 2008-06-22 18:29
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A very good poem! Well done!
Wildfleour Comment by: Wildfleour - 2008-06-22 08:18
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I sense the persistence of the beat of life. One can be surrounded by people, but be incredibly lonely. A sense of isolation pervades.
mynamelez Comment by: mynamelez - 2008-06-22 03:57
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This is a very good poem, almost haunting in its constant melody. It can't be easy to create a poem using a drum like motief. I'm not much of an expert when it comes to poerty but I am sure others will apraise it in more debth and add technical advice, such as what stanza should have done what to whom and why.

Well done. I'll see if I can come up with something similar (always happen to oblige a challenge but can't promise you a poetic rosegarden)
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