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Bored Free
So glad the Muses gave me some time
And I am feeling so free to rhyme.
I write by the beat of my own heart
And there I embrace a brand-new start.
I am used to learn music by hearing,
by ear... there's this sound of a ring
I play by the heat of the moment
or what the muse decides to consent.
I randomly write the words I sing.
Then I compose some notes and I swing,
grabbing my pen like a microphone,
so passionate of what I have done.
That's for me what counts inside and out,
what music and poetry are all about!
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Comment by: alien Online- 2008-07-02 05:15
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It's got a nice movement to it and a good rhythm but some places I just felt could be strengthened (such as line 2 and line 13). However, there are some nice monets where you use the imagery well: grabbing my pen like a microphone,
is nice. |
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| I like how you remind the reader that poetry IS music to the ears-I believe songs wouldn't exist without poets. I like not having rules; one can express themselves better. |
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Comment by: antunes - 2008-06-24 16:30
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Thanks, I love to write randomly, for sure. That gives me much pleasure But no fool: No rules, no tools. I mean, if you don't have a scheme to follow you may get lost on your own words, and get woozy and loose it, although to work on them takes some time and the muses don't amuse me so much)
And sonnets, they are just my favourites, so I took your advice and transformed it into one...
VOILA!:) |
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Here's a bit of free/rhyme type poem full of fun even though it's a bit introspective. I think I'd like this better if you considered building this into a formula poem, like a sonnet or even a terzanelle. You've got some great foundation lines:"as I randomly write" and "I play by the heat of the moment".
Fun piece, thanks for sharing it. |
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