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The Two Of Us (rev. 14/7/08)
(This poem will be published in the October 2008 issue of the online literary journal, WordCatalyst)
When I was an eagle
Your solemn pet
With glorious stratified wings
Silent and vigilant
At rest on the perch
You admired my stern beauty
My regal elegance
I would regard your immaculate purity
Delicate sandals
Revealed sculpted feet
You would approach me
Indulging me
Tempting me with grapes
Benignly held in your lips
My powerful beak
Grasping them
With the touch of a lamb
The closest we get to a kiss
When your head drew near
Your soft fragrance
Blessed me with goodness
Then you would don
The black leather gauntlet
My heart would beat faster
As I balanced myself on
The end of your arm
Your beguiling smile
As you unlocked the chain
Your tether to me
To fling me aloft and into the sky
Attaining my freedom
I would stay level
A few precious moments
Until the time came
For my heart-stopping dive
Down deep in the canyon
Becoming a blur
Of frightening speed
My vision crystalline
Detecting each pebble
Our hearts beat together
As I plunged through the air
We flew with the wind
Up to the stars
Emerging in evening
Feeling your joy
As I rose up on high
Gliding in graceful ellipses
Slowly descending
In a far-reaching survey
Of my forested domain
Quietly returning to my lady
My goddess
Who rewards me with field mice
And tasty soft lapins
My landing as peaceful
As moonlight in darkness
You show me the beauty
Of your unclothed body
Cloaked in sweet slumber
My spirit resplendent
In rapturous delight
Standing guard as your
Lover, protector
Until the sun blossoms again
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| Wonderful. Imagery is exquisite. Such a pleasure to read. Almost feel the wind and the thrill of flying, freedom and sharing a love. |
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| The images you create in a reader's head are just beautiful. Your poems put a smile on my face! Thanks for sharing them! |
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Some may call this anthropomorphous, but I see it as an observation on love, a love which can never be consumated. Sorta like the movie Lady Hawke (not to trivialize it.)
Very well writen. I have no quibbles. |
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Comment by: Honor - 2008-07-21 06:54
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| This is truly beautiful. Plesant to read, fantastic diction... you've got an excellent grasp of imagery. I only wonder if you focused a little more on the rhythm of the words if it might bring this piece to it’s full perfection. Very slight criticism aside, if this were prose it would be perfect perfect perfect. |
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| agree with skypoet, prob one of the most visual pieces I've read in a long time. beautiful, loving, and true. def deserves to be published. it is a tad long, my only complaint, if trimmed of some fat would be perfect. as is, however, it's one of my fav poems of yours and on of the best from this site. |
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