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Sophia
Sophia Argyris
United Kingdom, london

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A Need for Elevation

Do not leave me resting here
solid against the certainty of earth.
I want no reality, no weight
of physical existence,
take me somewhere over
the other side of the sky that
bleaches now where it used to streak in reds
and deeper colours,
once, long ago
when beauty was a visible perfection
all around my childhood.
Now, older and aging more
nothing sits well or remains still
long enough to be absorbed,
nothing induces tears, digs or cuts deep enough
to bring them crystalline and creeping into the world.
When did everything flatten out against
the flat dry concrete of the roads now lying
at my feet in place of all those
barley fields, beaches, those pine woods?
Tree bark, corn stalks, sea-smoothed stones;
textures I have touched my fingers still remember well,
palms still hold like imprints.
The taste of air (salt or fresh, as water)
is gone. Here where smoke and dirt sifts constantly,
irrevocably, inevitably, I am lost,
despite the gravity that's stuck me to this spot
and will not let me elevate
will not let me go.

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esknapp Comment by: esknapp - 2008-09-26 08:49
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Sophia,
Perfect. Don't change a thing.
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Apollo Comment by: Apollo - 2008-09-25 16:17
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I loved this line "take me somewhere over the other side of the sky that"

I felt like the word "crystalline" stuck out a little bit from the rest of the poem... but not enough to make me not love this...

I also loved this bit, "The taste of air (salt or fresh, as water)
is gone."

I really enjoyed this, your writing gets at my soul... thanks for posting, I look forward to reading more...
ac7904 Comment by: ac7904 - 2008-07-24 21:15
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Maybe the gravity is exactly what keeps the speaker de-elevated (de-evoluted). Wonderful. I was just reading Prufrock today and much of your poems I've consumed in the past half hour remind me of his sense of alienation. Only the speaker in this poem isn't reduced to a pair of claws. What happens that makes us lose something unnameable, something we were born possessing in great stores? Thanks for such clarity of thought and lyricism.
Mick Comment by: Mick Online- 2008-06-27 01:37
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This is really good Sophia... The strength of the piece doesn't waver throughout the write.
Love the 'Tree bark, corn stalks, sea-smoothed stones;' This gave me visions of my early childhood. Thanks for sharing... :)
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