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Comment by: - 2008-07-15 18:46
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a another very good poem
visually very wonderful |
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| A wonderful piece filled with subtle images, great rhythmic intensity, and perhaps most importantly---quite visual! Well done! |
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Comment by: alien - 2008-07-02 05:37
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| It's lovely how this poem really reads like looking at a dali picture whereby you're not sure at any moment whether you're looking the the sea or the sky and there's no obvious distinction between the two. It's such a strong way to write poetry and irresistable. I love it. Your language is golden. |
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Comment by: Mick - 2008-06-27 18:57
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Thank you
Crows... I've made a change to that line, It didn't sit right with me either.
Janyce... more like watching the stars from under water. That’s where I was trying to place the reader. |
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| I just see the reflection of the sky in the ocean. Is that what you had in mind? I like the way you express what you see; that is if what I see is what you see. Makes sense? |
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