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Shirine Aouad
Canada, Quebec, Montreal

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I tread hovering
Between resolution and indulgence
But when the silence comes
Solitude reveals itself potent,
Malleable, my strength
My vision
I've lost the words to lead me to oblivion
And I've begun to swim away from a shore
Peopled with sandy reasonings
-Only the buffered clarity of the waves
Communicates wisdom, and fortitude

One levels in continuous contact
With consciousness
And I refrain from interpersonal action
Knowing it full-well to be my salvation
Binding without touch, a line yet uncrossed
I stand within a network of sharp knives
With only dulled scars to protect me

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Mick Comment by: Mick - 2008-06-27 19:21
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Freaky stuff Shirine... Lots of sharp imagery mixed with intense wording.

You might want to look at the s in 'One levels'.

One level in continuous contact, or
All levels in continuous contact.

That little s does make quite a difference to the meaning of the line. Just a suggestion...
Happy writings. :)
Mick
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