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thembraincells
Katie js
United States, Wisconsin, Brookfield

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babe

Lately you've been coming on,
I don't know why,
Or what's going on.

And when you said bye,
You said babe,
And that word won't go away.

I told you I bought a swimsuit,
You said omg hot.

And then later,
You said "Hey hottie"
and I hope your kidding.

Friends said you were,
but its been like this all year.


And I secretly love it.

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DavidHe Comment by: DavidHe Online- 2008-06-30 18:27
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Simple yet interesting story! Well done!
michellemarie Comment by: michellemarie - 2008-06-30 06:18
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i love the simplicity.
Mortelle Comment by: Mortelle - 2008-06-28 13:25
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I'm sorry, but the "omg" in the middle completely turned me off.

@)----
Wildefriend Comment by: Wildefriend - 2008-06-27 22:16
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A beautiful piece...subtle, erotic, intimate, but simple in its own way!
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