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nonalienabductee
Niccole Segura
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United States, Pennsylvania/Ohio

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Spines and Pages

He cried out and shielded his head against the fluttering mass. They rushed past him, their dark-bright eyes contrasting against their racous plumage. Bookmarks fell out of their flock as they flew out the door.

“What did you do?” he shouted.

I shook my head and leaned against the wall, my strength gone. “I’m sorry.”

“All those first editions, the priceless folios—” He crossed to an empty shelf and slid a finger over it, as if to confirm reality. “How could you transform every single book?”

Staring at my hands, which quivered from the abrupt loss of energy, I winced. “I don’t know what happened. I was reading Wallace Stevens’ ‘Thirteen Ways of Looking—”

“I know the poem,” he snapped. “I told you not to read when you’re lively.”

Slumping to the floor, I rested my face on my knees. “I know. But you won’t let me leave the house in case anyone sees me—I was bored!” I glared at him. “Nobody should have to live like this!”

He flinched. “I don’t do it for my own amusement, you know.”

We looked at each other, and I sighed. “Alright. Where’s the butterfly net?”

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ZigZag Comment by: ZigZag - 2008-07-01 10:08
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A fun read, handled expertly. You make the impossible sound like the everyday, which is a feat in itself. I would not be sorry to see this continue (hint).
LouiseKay Comment by: LouiseKay - 2008-06-30 08:32
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Totally fun. Very Twilight-Zone-esque. Now I need to find & read the poem referred to here. Nice set of twists. :)
crows Comment by: crows - 2008-06-29 23:58
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Oh wow. This has precisely the right mixture of humor and profundity, of accessibility and absurdity. It's really, really marvelous. I adore the mystery; it 'suggests' so much, leaves so much to the imagination, which is really the key to flash fiction in my mind. We even have a good, tight plot-arc... there's action, explanation, and resolution felt. And, you know, the imagery is fabulous too XD
mrosesarro Comment by: mrosesarro - 2008-06-29 22:21
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I love the idea, although I would like to know a lot more, especially about our narrator. I do have one small suggestion. I think this phrase "dark-bright eyes contrasting against their racous plumage" would read better if instead of contrasting you used "a contrast to", or "was a contrast". The way it flows now feels rather disjointed.
JackPhade Comment by: JackPhade - 2008-06-29 22:08
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I like the routine feeling you give to the oddity that's just occured. Very cool piece.
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