The Vanishings (Niccole's challenge)
The fat faced, fluffy calico kitten played near the pond, in the backyard of our summer lake cottage. She sprinted over several flagstones following a frog. I sat nearby on a concrete bench, half asleep after hearing, “whoo, whoo, whoo,” all night, irritating me by keeping me awake. I wished I could tell my neighbor what she could do with her neighbor, living somewhere in the top of her tall cottonwood tree.
I was hypnotized, watched the tail flip back and forth. My female feline gave birth to four this litter but adopted three more, abandoned by their mother. We felt that it might be a coyote that snatched the vanished mother cat, hunting at night to feed her young.
Over the years, several complete litters of kittens disappeared around the same age and size, without a trace of fur, bones or coyote footprints. I brainstormed every idea in my head, trying to figure out the mystery of the missing cats.
One day my neighbor Sharon and I discussed the issue of the nightly noise, keeping both of us awake. She mentioned that several other species of UFOs moved into our neighborhood besides the verbal, wise one who stayed up all night.
It seemed I wasn’t the only neighbor who complained about the missing cat problem. A woman who lives two houses down the street lost two of her cats. Another neighbor fed hers outdoors on the front porch and one night it never showed up.
A breeze broke the still, summer air and I watched the fish dive under a swatch of algae. A shadow covered a great deal of the patio and I sat helpless, as huge talons dived low and grabbed the calico kitten by the scruff of her neck. She screeched in fear, as she was lifted and transported high into the cottonwood tree.
With tears flooding my eyes, I ran into the house and grabbed my husband’s rifle, attached the scope and loaded it. I didn't consider if I would hit the kitten instead of my target. I tried my best to focus and steady my hand. The rifle kicked me in the shoulder and although it was a good one hundred feet away, I heard the crackling of branches as the predator fell crashing to the ground.
When I saw I hit my mark, I called the fire department to rescue the kitten. When they used their extension ladder, they discovered a huge nest packed with regurgetated bones and fur. The kitten lay in shock but alive, bearing only a few puncture wounds. I was relieved until I heard the fireman ask, “Did you know it’s illegal to kill an endangered species?”
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I truly do apologize for how long it took me to get to these. I got distracted and then . . . completely forgot. Yikes. Again, so sorry.
Um, one beginning question--why the length? The challenge stated 200 words or less . . .
The calico kitten played near the pond, in the backyard of our summer cottage. She sprinted over several flagstones, following a frog. I sat on a concrete bench, exhausted from hearing, “whoo, whoo, whoo,” all night. I wished I could get rid of my noisy "neighbor," living somewhere in the top of the cottonwood tree. (a few edits to make things a bit less complicated and to chisel away at the word count)
I watched her tail flip back and forth, hypnotized by the motion but still nervous. We were having problems with cats vanishing, several litters over the years. We'd suspected coyotes, but there had never been any sign of either the predator or the prey. It was if they disappeared into thin air.
And I wasn’t the only one with a missing cat problem. A woman who lives two houses down the street lost two of her cats, and others had mentioned it to me as well. We were all baffled.
A breeze broke the still air and a shadow covered a great deal of the patio. I sat helpless as huge talons dove, grabbing the calico kitten by the scruff of her neck. She screeched in fear, as she was transported high into the cottonwood tree.
Tears flooding my eyes, I ran for my husband’s rifle, attached the scope and loaded it. Trying my best to focus and steady my hand, I shot. The rifle kicked me in the shoulder with recoil and I heard the crackling of branches as my kitten's captor fell with a crash.
Weeping with relief, I called the fire department to rescue the kitten. They discovered a huge nest packed with regurgitated bones and fur. My kitten lay in the middle of it, in shock but alive.
Happy, I reached for my pet. The fireman held it out of my reach, his face stern. "Don't you know it’s illegal to kill an endangered species?”
Hopefully this a little helpful. Thanks again for writing, sorry for not commenting sooner! |
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| Changed it again, Karl. I think this is a keeper. |
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Getting better. I'd drop the bit about the shotgun though, rifles are a bit more surgical. I know buckshot sounds like fun, but it most certainly would cream the cat as well as the bird. A typical 12 gauge round sends 10-15 buckshot flying in one trigger pull.
We had a red tailed hawk hanging around the are for a couple months last year. I believe our dog (14 pound barking football) witnessed said hawk pick off a squirrel or something. For several days, he'd look outside, and then up for several seconds before stepping out to do his thing. |
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Okay everyone, I changed the story. Thing is, There is a bunch of owls living in the cottonwood trees here and the trees are huge, full of leaves and you can't see what is on the branches.
Second-I live out in the country where people shoot their rifles and shotguns without problems-especially at raccoons and opossum. They can't kill turkeys or birds though or they will be fined.
We all truly believe that the coyotes and owls are taking our pets. I have seen hawks but not any eagles. Some owls here are endangered. |
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Comment by: crows - 2008-06-30 10:27
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Interesting read... I can see this potentially being reasonable (the gunshot etc) in slightly more rural communities; having grown up in a slightly more rural community myself, once you got outside of the main urban area of Anchorage (and even some parts of the town) I don't think things like this are unheard of. Course, in LA... but anyway, that's an aside.
I wonder, though, if it wouldn't be more reasonable to infer a different bird than the owl... you did well making clear what the 'predator' was an owl by their tell-tale call, but from experience, owls fly extremely silently (at least, I've never heard the oncoming 'flapping' when I've been close to them, which is -dang creepy-!). Also, owls tend to - after consuming their prey - vomit up pellets not in their own nests, containing the fur, bones, and any other undigestible particles in a neat little grey package. Even a kitten seems like a big meal for an owl. However, in the town I grew up in, people with small pets needed to be concerned with an avian predator - bald and golden eagles would pick up cats, toy poodles, and chihuahuas. It happened a lot in camp grounds, people would let their little dogs run around (and be further out in the wild than in the city proper, though honestly it didn't take much) and then WHOOSH! Fluffy is GONE! And I'll tell ya, you'll hear eagle wings on the air. Also, it's a big enough bird to really 'crash' through trees if shot. AND it's illegal to kill them! Obviously, you don't have to take this suggestion XD but it was just a thought that might tighten up the realism a little bit. I really enjoy your interpretation of the idea; it's a pretty compelling short story. |
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