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| Hummingbird connects title to poem through the splendid last lines, which work double duty: your brief yet sharp imagery brings me to the green, and when the bird sips, it's as if I do, as well. |
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Comment by: Sophia - 2008-07-16 04:52
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You use very rich language in your poetry, and this one is really lovely. I liked this part in particular:
'where the
valley
contorts
at the hip.' |
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Comment by: - 2008-07-15 18:44
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great poem
very good |
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| Yeah, I'm gonna have to agree with everyone else; the last two lines are are great. This is a good piece, built up well and full of description with such few words. |
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Comment by: alien - 2008-07-08 05:35
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| I love the little rhyme at the end there - really ties it up and gave me a nice surprise. Nice shape and lovely language. Well done! |
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