Battle of the Mind
Battle of the Mind
A Poem by Identitycrisis
Battle of the mind
Always in it, disaster
look without judgement, around
See the same, feel it?
One must figure in
the reason..forgiveness
or not, distractions swirling
'round angry, insecurity, disappointment
Falter..pulling imagination, yearnings
blame shortcomings, not brilliance?
To fret or not, misgivings vicious
Being strong despite the weakness
Difficult, distant travel
Snap, falter and flounder
battle of the mind
ferocious distractor
© 2008 Identitycrisis
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Since I am somewhat learning disabled when it comes to most poetry (I'm going to blame dyslexia and my mother), my value as a reader of poems is rather dubious. Maybe my main value in this regard is in helping to determine how accessible or inaccessible a poem is to a semi-literate person on the "outside" (assuming that even matters).
So, while most of this poem resonates with me at a personal level because I am, well, rather fucked up, there are other parts that not even my warped mind can quite get a handle on. For instance, no matter how many times I read it, I can't seem to figure out "look without judgement, around - See the same, feel it?" or "Falter..pulling imagination, yearnings."
All of which means not that there's anything wrong with the poem - only that it is sometimes a bit opaque to people like me.
By the way, I love the last 3 lines... |
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Comment by: DavidHe Online- 2008-07-05 17:14
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| Very good. Carry on. Best wishes. |
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| Interesting jerky rhythms---very nice! |
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