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On The Corner Of Chilvers And Jackson
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There was a thousand things I could have said
I just pointed toward the sky
You nodded as if you agreed
I didn't have to say a god damn thing
I can't remember the last time I saw you
Except when you came and took all you could
Making promises as you drove away
I just laid in defeat in the front yard of a prison
That once was my escape
And I thought about leaving
And I thought about leaving
And I thought about a lot of things
But strangely enough I didn't feel a thing
I gave my best shot and I made every effort
I could afford to make
Now I'm broke with nowhere to go
I'm broke down with nowhere to go
Why did it take so long for me to realize
I was the last person at this show
Everyone has already found
A better place to go
I never should have thought that the people
I used to know would stay the same
Cuase everyone changes
So I'm working on changing
I'm working on leaving
I'm working so hard for nothing
While you were waiting around for somthing
I was on my way to the corner of Chilvers and Jackson
Now I'm not sure where I'm going
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"Cuase everyone changes" consider changing "cuase" to "'cause".
My favorite part would be the
"And I thought about leaving
And I thought about leaving
And I thought about a lot of things"
It distracted me for a second to relate the piece to my own life, then snapped me right back in to your writing, wanting to know what happened next. Good writing.
These seem to be words that poured out of you in a flood. It might help if you can describe the corner of Chilvers and Jackson, so we can really empathize and feel and see the place you're talking about...;-)
