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thembraincells
Katie js
United States, Wisconsin, Brookfield

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gears

Comfort is a thing I'll never see,
Because when I change gears on my bike,
I'll start to feel alright,
And as I pedal,
The grinding of the metal,
Causes noises I can't stand.

And I'll click them away,
So that I can continue,
But I'm always sweating,
At my next venue.

Lying in bed,
I'll toss and turn,
And I'll feel alright,
Till my arm falls asleep,
Or my leg or my foot,
And Ill try again,
But I always give up.

When I love a song, I'll listen to it.
Believe it or not,
But then the words are static,
And it means nothing,
And I move on.

You can say I am never happy,
And I'll probably agree,
Cause whenever I feel alright,
It's taken from beneath me.

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nerdia314 Comment by: nerdia314 - 2008-08-27 12:42
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this is really thought-provoking. my favorite part was the fourth stanza, and the line "But then the words are static." i can never get that feeling into my writing..
thembraincells Comment by: thembraincells - 2008-07-11 13:23
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maybe...

wisdom
charlieomatic Comment by: charlieomatic - 2008-07-11 05:59
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nice specific writing. Captures the angst of youth. Question, would you rather have a potion that would give you more comfort, wisdom or excitement in your life?
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