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Going solo
Strobe lights danced across the Honda parked before us.
“Remember the Branch Davidians?”
My eyes darted to Keller. “The nutbags in Texas?”
He turned down the chattering radio. “Those nutbags had kids, same as Wanda. We don’t want to make orphans—hers or ours. So you need to cuff her before backup storms in.”
My mouth went dry.
Keller unsnapped his holster and cracked his door. “I’ll cover you.”
I grabbed the ticket book and slid out of the car, knees stiff from adrenaline. Mind racing, I stepped up to the Accord and leaned over.
Gorgeous blue eyes peered out.
“Miss Ellis, if you’ll step out to sign this warning, we can have you on your way in no time.”
Wanda hesitated.
A speed metal drum threatened to burst my chest.
Flashing headlights approached from the highway.
Shit.
She yawned, eyes on me, and opened her door. “Sure. Thanks officer.”
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| You had me. The tension is strong. I imagine that every officer across this country thinks this way for every possible stop. I read your bio and the path you have been following through life sounds similar to the one I have been on with a few small differences like my tour in Vietnam in 1966. It was in Vietnam that I first read Interview With a Vampire and The Lord of the Rings. In high school I read hundreds of science fiction books. |
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Comment by: Liv - 2008-07-21 22:38
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| This story did a terrific job of creating anxiety for me...Gotta love it when 150 words can do that. Nice job. |
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| you create a great scene here. i really like how you give attention to the finer details as well as the big picture--and none of it in an "in-your-face" kind of way. great work. |
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Comment by: Nora - 2008-07-18 11:44
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| Most intense, Mr. Rademacher. Well done, as usual. |
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Comment by: Arley - 2008-07-15 06:24
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| Very good, Karl! Great economy with the words to produce a fat tale in a short space. Oh, and don't let Janyce fool you, we ARE nutbags we just ain't Branch-Davidians, heh heh. |
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