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Going Solo - Challenge 40
The geeks thronged around me, congregating in packs of slushy-slurping deadbeats, stuffing their faces with grease-saturated wieners. I could almost feel the fat congealing in my arteries. An argument broke out at one of the crowded cardgame tables that pockmarked the conference centre as some douchebag contested the rules. I elbowed Deckard in the ribs.
“My pants are starting to chafe and these stupid boots are killing me.”
“You should try my fucking costume, man. It must be a hundred degrees in this thing. You've got it easy.”
I looked up at the towering mound of fuzz, “You were the one that chose Chewbacca.”
A miniature Optimus Prime, high on a cocktail of sugar and hyperactivity, crashed into my legs. “Little shit.”
“Chill out, man, he’s only a kid.”
“Damn it! How are we meant to find the mark? Look out for his Spock-ears?”
Deckard sniggered: “Use the Force.”
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Great twist on the challenge, cracking dialogue and an intriguing set-up. Why are they here? Who is the mark? Sets the scene for a longer story.
My only comment is that I'd kill 'slushy-slurping' because I've got a thing about alliteration. But that's just me. |
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great great great. good to know i'm not the only geek in here.
too cool...although I wasn't born for the original star wars (hehe, sorry, Wanda) I have done my fair share of lining up for midnight screenings...jurassic park, spider-man, Episodes 1-3 etc etc...but never been to a convention :)
I'm so glad someone picked up Han Solo. it was in the back of my head when i set this challenge. |
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Comment by: Nora - 2008-07-18 12:05
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| That was ridiculously fun to read. Nice one. |
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wOOt! Freakingly geekish.
Btw,'Douchebag' stays to contest the rules. :)
Missed out on the battle scene though.
Too good. |
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Comment by: Arley - 2008-07-16 06:41
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| This one has to take the prize for originality, Rupert, very well done! Oh, and don't change "douchebag" it works perfectly. |
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