Going Solo (wee # 40)
"Mom, think about what you’re doing?"
"I have given it a lot of thought, dear. Does this dress make me look fat?" her mother said holding a white floral number to her body.
Feeling defeated Karen sat down and sighed, "No, Mom, its fine."
Karen’s mother neatly folded the dress and placed it into her red suitcase.
"You shouldn’t make that face, it shows all your wrinkles," her mother joked.
"I’m just worried about you. This is a big deal and Dad’s only been gone for six months."
"Honey, I loved your father, but he never wanted to go anywhere. I’ve always wanted to see Italy and now I will."
"But alone, Mom?"
"Yes, honey, I got married when I was 17. I’m 71 and have been surrounded by a loving family for all these years. I love you all, but I think it’s time I go solo for a while."
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nice moment captured here.
Mum has let her hair down and, naturally, Daughter is worried. You get that across without forcing it down our throats.
Liked--"You shouldn’t make that face, it shows all your wrinkles," her mother joked. (can relate to that)
only thing bugging me is the end:
---it’s time I go solo for awhile.
awhile= for a while
SO YOU CAN SAY:
it’s time I go solo for a while.
OR
it’s time I go solo awhile.
nice one, jen :) |
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Comment by: DKav Online- 2008-07-17 17:06
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"You shouldn’t make that face, it shows all your wrinkles," her mother joked.
I was wondering why she mentioned wrinkles, and as I read on, I realised what age the daughter might be if her mother is 71. I liked that little detail. |
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Comment by: troyarn - 2008-07-17 15:49
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Great stuff here, Jennifer. I did the same thing (coming to Bosnia alone) three years ago (for different reasons). So kudos to mom and may she love the Italian thing!!!
You really showed us something...married for so many years, but unable to do what she wanted to do deep down.
Now, God bless him, her love is gone so she is going to move on and do the things she has held off on.
Like I said, great stuff here. You are someone I do like to read. |
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Comment by: WLC - 2008-07-17 07:55
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I always heard it as, "You shouldn't make that face, it'll freeze that way." haha
Yeah, I'm with Mom. Life's short--boogy while the sun shines! |
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Comment by: Arley - 2008-07-17 06:56
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| Good work, Jennifer, and go, Granny, go! |
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