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nonalienabductee
Niccole Segura
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Fair

“What the hell is this?”

The husband’s voice echoed in the halls of the hospital. The orderlies winced, but the jaded nurses ignored it.

A woman’s sobs followed his outburst.

“Sir. Sir, please calm down.”

“Calm down? Listen, you sonuvabitch, don’t tell me to what to do. Look at that baby!”

The receptionist pursed her lips, disapproving of the noise. It was unseemly. She took hold of the rotary dial, fingers prepared to call the police.

“Sir, you need to stop making a scene.”

“Where’s my son?!”

“But . . . this is your son. I’m sorry if you’re unhappy, but—”

A loud crash from the room. A few people, sweating in the waiting room, glared in the direction of the racket.

“No it damn well is not!”

His wife, still crying, looked down at the baby in her arms. He had her eyes—and his grandfather’s mahogany skin.

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MitchellNoel Comment by: MitchellNoel - 2008-07-23 22:50
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nice story, very well written as usual.

recessive gene OR incest?? interesting either way.

Tension is built seamlessly and the final blow executed with precision.

(I'm a sucker for "sonuvabitch" especially when spelled like this)
lflwriter Comment by: lflwriter - 2008-07-20 14:05
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A recessive gene is a possibility. I wonder if this husband knows about her heritage. Maybe he would calm down if he finds out. If he doesn't, divorce is an option. Just because two people get married doesn’t mean they know each other. Marriage is the last frontier where time and exploration turn up pall kinds of surprises.
BethShanFan Comment by: BethShanFan - 2008-07-18 17:12
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Hahahahaha, WOOOOW!
Empress Comment by: Empress - 2008-07-18 09:17
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Boy o boy. I love that ending. Real. Good job
Arley Comment by: Arley - 2008-07-18 05:58
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Great twist at the end of a well written tale!
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