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Apollo
Vincent Slade
United States, Virginia, Richmond

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Earth

Maps leading indiscretions astray,
Yet X marks the spot.
Spots where we place the ashtrays…
For burning hearts.

Grown out frustration,
Breeding sunshine hearts.
Manifest destiny...
Withered the sunshine to dark.
Born feeling dismay.

Golden, is an age.
It describes sought after rocks;
So sought after,
That pages were burnt black...
Until all words stopped.
We all just smile and nod.

Life a task that made the living question God.
Mechanisms malfunctioning,
Make-believing we don’t maraud...
Self-destructive humanity and the Earth interlocked.

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bnaughtyjoey Comment by: bnaughtyjoey - 2008-08-21 19:56
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I dig the lines:
"Spots where we place the ashtrays…
For burning hearts."
As pour over this poem contemplatively as one would a map and I can visualise this.
mercymanic Comment by: mercymanic Online- 2008-08-18 15:09
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"Grown out frustration,
Breeding sunshine hearts.
Manifest destiny...
Withered the sunshine to dark."

Those lines just roar. Love this one.
Comment by: - 2008-08-16 11:01
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I agree with Poetsoul. That last phrase really stands out.
Artorius Comment by: Artorius - 2008-08-07 10:34
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I like it. Unlike Alien, I didn't get a positive picture but like she said, everybody sees things different. I think you did well.
Apollo Comment by: Apollo - 2008-07-25 16:00
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Hows this... no more positive (sorry Alien- like you said we all see things differently) but a bit re-structured...
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