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Nora
Nora Gruenberg
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Fair--Wee Challenge 40

My brother: tall, still towhead at age thirty and as good as he is good-looking. Then there's me: short and bald by the time my acne finally started fading.

My club foot healed well after the series of surgeries. I only have a slight limp, but that lack of symmetry is reflected in the subtle droop of my left upper eyelid. I am, unequivocally, one of the goofiest looking fuckers you have ever seen.

I know; it doesn't seem fair. He got all the looks, and I mean all of them. I can see it in people's eyes. How can I be so happy when my twin got all of the gifts? Maybe he didn't. I don't know it for a fact, and I'm not going to argue, but I've heard I've got just about the biggest dick anyone has ever seen.

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icy Comment by: icy - 2008-08-04 05:53
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Heh, awesome last line!
frees340 Comment by: frees340 - 2008-08-01 09:17
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Whoa! That last line was killer! Man! My eyebrows flew into my hairline! Man!
Great laughs, witty images, interesting points. Wish i had a sibling.
Vyasar
mrsspark Comment by: mrsspark - 2008-07-26 12:11
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Ha! Loved this. Personally, I'd fall for any man who could fit 'unequivocally' and 'fuckers' into the same sentence, regardless of his below-stairs blessings. Not a single nit to pick, I regret.
Thanks as ever for the read! XX
Deepbluejc Comment by: Deepbluejc - 2008-07-21 20:55
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Good stuff here, no crits.
Nora Comment by: Nora Online- 2008-07-20 09:51
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Thanks for the suggestions, people. I think Lee's suggestion will address the issue nicely. Heh heh ... Mitch said "finishing up with the big dick!"
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