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Arley
Arley Owens, Jr.
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United States, Texas, Midland

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The Watcher (Alien 20)

Entwined with weepers in the hollows,
Empty, bleeding souls.
The have-nots all are gathered here.
No light appears at noon,
No one approaches with a smile,
No dainties are enjoyed,
Hard labor is employed,
The Watcher stands, annoyed.

Insane arrivals scream with bellowed
Lungs of sulphur coals.
Brimstone feeds the fear.
No hope within this gloom,
No one has the strength to battle,
No weapons can be forged,
Within this crimson fort,
The Watcher holds his court.

Whippings for the never sleeping,
Beatings for the always weeping,
Bulging eyes tattooed with creeping
Worms with stinging tails.
The Watcher rings the bell:
Rigorous, pointless toil,
On hot, unyielding soil,
Above the boiling oil.

Long forgotten are the pleasured
Moments in the folds,
Composing carefree years.
No thoughts beyond the doom,
No one dares resist The Watcher,
No escape, penned up like cattle,
Flames erupt through crusty tallow,
We have fallen into shadow.

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Arley Comment by: Arley Online- 2008-08-28 06:14
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Thanks Tim!
thatonekid Comment by: thatonekid - 2008-08-28 02:17
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it was very good, felt more like watching a movie.
Arley Comment by: Arley Online- 2008-07-31 06:12
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Thanks a heap, John, really appreciate it!
Juan2 Comment by: Juan2 Online- 2008-07-30 19:19
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Geez man, this is daaaark n' creeeeeepy - good stuff! I too love the rhythm, it's sharp and it cracks like the whips of the poem. Also the rhymes, both internal and the end rhymes of the last two lines really cement that rhythm. Paints a vividly depressing scene, easy to see the doom and destruction and desecration that this world has succumbed to. Very well done

happy writings.
Arley Comment by: Arley Online- 2008-07-28 06:05
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Thank you, Carrie, means a lot to me that a poet of your high caliber likes this!
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