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William Hammett
United States

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The Five-Dollar Apocalypse

Meriwether Stout entered the fortuneteller’s small studio on a lark, for he didn’t believe in crystal balls, astrology, or tarot. He was a bookkeeper, a clerk who juggled numbers the way a circus clown juggles balls. He’d never dropped a nine or a six—not any number—for he was a model of circumspection and rationality. But when Madame Zoya touched his arm, he felt a jolt of electricity jump through his veins and then burrow into the very marrow of his forty-year-old bachelor bones. For a brief moment, he felt his skull had been rendered into a photographic negative.

“The years will be unkind,” Madame Zoya told him. “That’ll be five bucks, mister.”

On the street again, Meriwether was flustered and checked his pocket watch to find an anchor in the temporal, green-ledger universe. The timepiece had mysteriously gained three hours. The five-billion-year-old sun was lower in the sky, and the shadows of pedestrians looked unnaturally long and ominous. Nearly everyone looked long in the tooth.

He walked on and glanced at his pocket watch again. The minute hand was spinning wildly, like a third base coach waving a runner home. Building facades cracked, and ivy tore great fissures in the sidewalk like tendrils of sentient, malevolent rope. Cars grew rusty, sagging on reddish-brown axles that had not spun into gear for eons.

Meriwether was nonplused, which is to say his brain was experiencing a minus for the first time in his Newtonian world of rational, balanced numbers. He glanced up to see the glacier, a mile high, scraping its way down Broadway.

He did no snap out of a trance or awaken from a nightmare. The years had indeed been unkind.

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wordz Comment by: wordz - 2008-07-26 08:37
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Wanda, you're too kind! Thanks!

lflwriter--thanks for stopping by. I liked that line too :)
WLC Comment by: WLC Online- 2008-07-26 07:57
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Just astounding, William. Really didn't want it to end at 287 words.

First para = wonderful hook--slick descriptive prose.
Sec para = I was sure it was going to veer off into humor.
Then the slide into The Twilight Zone--only far better than any episode I've ever seen.

Perfect surreal build up to the ending.

Just too many killer lines to mention--it was all killer.

Great title too.

Standing in front of the screen applauding!
Wanda
lflwriter Comment by: lflwriter - 2008-07-25 09:38
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I like the way you spin your words to create the mood of the moment. "a clerk who juggled numbers the way a circus clown juggles balls."
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